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The Hunt

Tara Jo33 Comments

As they speak in hushed voices, the telltale sound of the dogs gets louder. She shares her thoughts, he listens and replies.
They can tell by the sounds of the baying that the dogs are closing in on their prey.
Howling voices getting louder, shoulders tense, eyes begin to dart to the side of the path. They glance at one another to gauge readiness.
Suddenly a gray flash as the rabbit crosses ahead; too late the gun comes up! More time for her and her dad to talk as they listen to the beagles and the rabbit begin another circle…

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Tara Jo

33 thoughts on “The Hunt”

  1. raina

    I liked this, there’s a window to a valuable time they are both sharing.

    http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-do-not-follow-me-home/

    1. Tara

      Thank you 🙂

  2. Nifti

    Hello Tara, nice story! Don’t believe I’ve been over by yours before…
    Just a heads up, your link on Madison’s is wrong, but I got over here nonetheless 🙂

    1. Tara

      i think i fixed the link, thanks for the heads up 🙂

  3. Laura L Mays Hoopes

    Hunting with dad is a bit hard for me to read, since I love rabbits, but the story works well. It hints at a quiet talking time, which I got with my dad by “fishing.” Nice tension and surprise. Cheers,
    Laura
    http://westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-woods-of-danger.html

    1. Tara

      we spent a lot of time fishing too, but this path just spoke of running the beagles through the woods to me 🙂

  4. Lady Marilyn Kay Dennis

    Interesting take on the prompt. Mine’s here: http://marilynkaydennis.wordpress.com/madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-witch

    1. Tara

      Thank you

  5. erinleary

    I wasn’t sure who was hunting what (or who) but like the build up of tension and the camaraderie.

    Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/flash-friday-fiction-5/

    1. Tara

      yea, i intended it to start out much more menacing than it really was, just some quality time with Daddy 🙂

  6. Gilly Gee

    I enjoyed this and I’m glad the rabbit is ok 🙂

    1. Tara

      the rabbit usually won these contests 🙂 but it was fun to go out and get the dogs some exercise 🙂

  7. Linda

    I got the impression they weren’t part of the hunt but were hunt saboteurs instead. I loved the fact that at first I thought they were being hunted and then the realisation it was an animal – even thought I am anti-hunt …. if that makes sense 🙂

    Here’s mine: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-visiting-grannys/

    1. Tara

      thanks, that was my intent to make it seem more scary and suspenseful and then just a regular day in the woods

      1. Linda

        I think you did it exceptionally well too 🙂

  8. Lora Mitchell

    An interesting piece if one enjoys the sport. Here’s mine:
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

    1. Tara

      Thank you, i know not every likes the idea of hunting, but it was always a part of my life growing up.

  9. Joanna (Lazuli Portals)

    I’m on the side of the rabbits too. Good to see some family bonding time, though!

    Mine’s here: http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/expect-the-unexpected

    1. Tara

      Thanks, i am not much of a rabbit hunter either, but it was always nice for some 1:1 time with dad

  10. oldentimes

    🙂 so many mornings!

  11. Reading Pleasure

    Interesting moment for father and daughter and I think she is quite brave. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/fridayfictioneers-sacrilege/

    1. Tara

      Thanks!

  12. JKBradley

    No ElmerFudd here, this was a bonding moment between father and daughter, it was sweet.

    Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/flash-fiction-friday-letting-go/

    1. Tara

      definitely!

  13. theforgottenwife

    I like how it was a time for them to bond under the guise of hunting. Very nicely done. Here’s mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-6152012-the-watcher/

    1. Tara

      i always thought of it more as time to spend with dad vs. the hunt itself. good memories i will keep forever

  14. Brandon Scott

    Sounds to me like the gun went up too slow on purpose. More quality time that way.
    http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/turn-back/

    1. Tara

      hmmm.. could be 🙂 rabbit was never my favorite, but it was the one that kept us talking and moving rather than sitting quietly and waiting, so it always lent itself better to the heart to hearts that can be so rare between father and daughter, especially as the daughter gets older.

  15. Virginia Pohlenz

    Reminds me of that Country Song that says, “She thinks we’re just fishin.” Great job of portraying the bonding between father and daughter.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

  16. Kathy McClure

    I bet the beagles are happy to have more time to run. I got a strong sense of early morning, mists and the muted sounds of nature around them. A lot of detail with only a few words.

    Thanks for coming by,
    Kathy
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/breadcrumbs/

  17. Kwadwo

    It’s all about sharing quality time. A father shares it with his daughter while the dogs share theirs with the rabbit. lol

    Mine’s here: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/15/six-oclock/

  18. Madison Woods

    I’m surprised at how many are glad the rabbit was okay, lol, when I felt a bit of disappointment that they waited too long. I used to run my grandfather’s dogs and never actually hunted, but enjoyed the process all the same. He hunted and I was just giving them exercise between. Good story 🙂

  19. Janet

    Why is it that dads only open up when doing something (hunting, fishing, etc)?

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